Brain Stress

I replied to:

MC Illest
Kat Frost
Technician
Reppin



My mind is overflowed, trapped in an elevated level~of~stress
Hell constrantly quizzes my mind, Sins are a devilish~test
My pride grows weary, but I continue on a sullivant~quest
Fate detereorates my heart, I inherited a delicate~chest
Now, I lay rampant ferocity over towering my competition
With flagrant velocity, Kill foes wit no remorseful decisions
Constant injections of weed recently distored da vision
All my knowledge locked dowm...Entire resources imprisioned

yeah, well vocab overload of complexity which worked..flow was good..all i can advise you on is to use metas and more multis to improve this..it was short yet sweet...

Upping for mo feedback...

Pretty small little verse but not bad.. flow was cool maybe neeed some more wittyness.. better pjunchs n shti but still not bad man.. keep workin at it

Thank God For Dictionaries Or You Would Be Stumped

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Originally posted by Evolve
Thank God For Dictionaries Or You Would Be Stumped

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TY for all the feedback guys...

Does anyone have any last minute feedback before I drop my next drop rhyme.....

this was pretty good, some nice lines and some creative thinking a nice way to explain stress, or what not. Some good vocabulary. Nice job.

Peep myn in my sig, thanks

My mind is overflowed, trapped in an elevated level~of~stress
Hell constrantly quizzes my mind, Sins are a devilish~test

^ nice rhyming skills with the multies..

My pride grows weary, but I continue on a sullivant~quest
Fate detereorates my heart, I inherited a delicate~chest

^ very slick..that second line.."delicate~chest" was extremely smart..

Now, I lay rampant ferocity over towering my competition
With flagrant velocity, Kill foes wit no remorseful decisions

^ nice wordplay throughout...

Constant injections of weed recently distored da vision
All my knowledge locked dowm...Entire resources imprisioned

^ nice ending to the drop aswell...

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I liked the drop as a whole..had a good amount of wordplay but this could have easily been a lot longer...I know you seem like you like writing short samples but if you spent a bit more time you could have made this into a full song cos you've got the right vocanb and also you have a good flow..
basically..heavy piece..will be watching for your drops..wun