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When The Sky Falls
When the Sky Fell i was in captivity,limited memory
infinite similies,and my mind confines my sensorys
this small cell,thats littered with filth and desolation
were built for seperation,while i wilt with hesitation
never paitent,the news displays senseless violence
my vocals never mention silence,consent my guidance
tha way tha skys fallin isnt the way we anticipated
when our race is faced with death were this creative
peace is a neccesity,no complexity in life effectivly
these rhymes directin me,suspect but not arrestin me
clouds shroud tha sky like a crowd of dark figures
lightnin swells,excitin my cells,bright as hell,but bigger
these flames released from beneath my feet prints
complete with crease thatll cease to defeat scents
no sulfuric wave,tha purest blade as hes curin graves
devils rise,embezzleds rebels pride,to ensure its place
there in the book of life but gods not givin assistance
ashamed of what we become our demise still is persistent
so the day the sky fell we all must have remembered
if it wasnt wiped from our memory and recollections disembered.
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When the Sky Fell i was in captivity,limited memory
infinite similies,and my mind confines my sensorys
was the best part liked it better than your last this had much better flow my head was boucnin like marisupalpouches lol
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dawg u did ur thing on this for real vocab nice, structure perfect, and just a really dope peice......... keep droppin...
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Keep It Going Man, That Was a Straight Real Piece.
-Vocabulary, Flow, Structure, Basically It Was All Good.
I Like The Opening Line, Holla, Keep Doing Ya'Thang Boy.
Peace
-1Love, 1God-
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the imagery in this was brilliant. i don't know why you used such a large font size, but other than that, this was a real nice read man. especially with the mature vocab, nyce flow, real smooth in my opinion. but once again, the description of your words was the strongest part in your piece. this was a good read, unique topic also. keep it up man.
plz return some feedback on this piece.
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=220503
thanks man.
peACE
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thanks for tha feed back...up.
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I really liked readin diz piece. Nice imagery n real good structre. Nice flow n errything. Shit was dope. Keep em comin. 1
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nice piece yo had some complex vocabulary going, and some home truths to boot
shit time out pz
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