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Judgement Day
Chorus
(Singin)In the end we all share the same fate
(Rappin)death then judgement day
(Singin)tryin to get inside them pearly gates
(Rappin)cause hell's the other way
(Singin)life's actions get put on replay
(rappin)as God reviews the tape
(Singin)When it's your turn what you think he's gonna say?
(Singin)which way you gonna take?
Verse1
Years of dealin got me sweatin profusely, waitin in line
concealin my feelins more than usually, it's judgement time
think back on past mistakes and the first to pop in my head
was the first time I gripped the glock and popped, shot out lead
I was disturbed, shakin, vision blurred, the car swirved and hopped the curb
I turned and dipped, on my word, don't know if I hit, stomach stirred
heard the sirens lift from the silent night and peirce my ears
eyes was fierce to tears, fightin em off and sayin cheers to fears
hate my deceitful peers, they peer pressured me
now I'm near to the edge, in church cryin confessions-G
In the end we all share the same fate
death then judgement day
tryin to get inside them pearly gates
cause hell's the other way
life's actions get put on replay
as god reviews the tape
when it's your turn what you think he's gonna say?
which way you gonna take?
Verse2
The line inches forward as people rejected and turned away
my minds racin more, if I'm rejected I'll burn today
I question my faith and pray, a deliberate Kodak
hopin that God will see I'm repentin and show that...
words thats present in the bible and preached are carried out
show forgiveness and be forgived, "I'm sorry's" just air me out
I'm in extreme anguish, a migrane of faults crashin in my head
hopefully the ends painless, this cult mass is my friends
my affiliation and extensive involvment with masses of criminals
incriminates me cause I didn't pay heed to messages subliminal
In the end we all share the same fate
death then judgement day
tryin to get inside them pearly gates
cause hells the other way
life's actions get put on replay
as god reviews the tape
when it's your turn what you think he's gonna say?
which way you gonna take?
before I left this mornin, my mom's was scornin, "stop the sinnin son"
walked out grinnin mom I'm winnin, hopped up in the Hum
patrolled the block, scrutinizin the smaller crews behind me
the blue was eyein me, tossed a stack of green, they cruisin by me
on top of my game, that's when the shots rang, and came to stain...
the white tee with my crimson rain, in pain, I'm slain
it's my turn, I bow before the lord my knees burn, and mind churns
begin to cry as he mumbles denied terms, his eyes stern
to my shoulder he puts his hand, to distinguish I'm damned
pulls back quickly lookin sickly, then he's screamin "ahmen"
son you've repented, every crime commited resulted in church confessions
I give your soul carressin, and for your holy repents, here's your blessin
*Opens Gates*
Chorus to end
-Play-Boy
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bad flow in the chorus, could use more vocab, but it was sdtill decent, the chorus didnt flow well at all, i dunno...... maybe im reading it worng, but i still dont like it, your imagery was ok, but this wasnt an original topic, try dreaming up some new shit. and try to throw some multies in their
overall decent piece, 7/10
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bad flow in the chorus, could use more vocab, but it was sdtill decent, the chorus didnt flow well at all, i dunno...... maybe im reading it worng, but i still dont like it, your imagery was ok, but this wasnt an original topic, try dreaming up some new shit. and try to throw some multies in their
overall decent piece, 7/10
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yeah chorus is hard to follow....is it being sung, rapped or just spoken....hard to grasp the flow of it....Overall the verses were nice..probably sound better in audio then they look in text. good piece homie
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DAMN....I forgot to write where it was singin and where it was rappin in the chorus my bad....hopefully it sounds better to you now...I was wonderin why ya'll couldn't get the flow of the chorus....anyway thanks for feedback...uppin
-The Optimist
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uppin for feedback^^^^^^^
