Adviser to the Throne

Adviser to the Throne




Having a sense of pride isnt the same as winning
cause even winners that eventually lose arent soo forgiving
saints condemn the sinning, but become the sinner
quick to devour the unrighteous only become its next dinner
there's no respect in abusing fame n fortune
no one whose given life can understand abortion
fear of torture, waiting as a gullible loath
nights at the bar without the hypocritical oath
i propose a toast, to the humble at heart
loving those who've failed cause they've stumbled at start
running from sharks, that surface when purpose
is being achieved, treat those cowards as serpents
to defeat a beast one must become an animal
destiny meats the streets, those trials create a cannibal
so kings remember your place, not just between her waist
but reign with such a powerf that can only be described as grace

Will you fix up? Theres some places that are out of sorts and i cant understand, but i like this peice.

Terrible. Poor flow, you have no idea of what you're talking about clearly and are just rambling. At best basic as hell, but you deserve to be dunked in battery acid for this terrible open mic. Worst of the month.

This was obviously typed up quickly, i mean sweet virgin Mary Knowp, you misspelled "so". There was a few instances a word was missing. despite shit like that, This was awesome. I loved the concept, the duality of man type deal it was great. aside from the obviously rushed areas the flow was good, and your choice of words played well into your concept. I really liked your choice of rhyming words at the end, using compound rhymes as oppose to simple ones.

I wish this was longer and more polishd but i liked it.

peep Steed Heart bro
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthre...ce-Steed-Heart

I got it...this had to be a keystyle, the message was clear and the basics were covered. Yeah the brevity kills this but for as short as it is you still brought out some contrast in making your point. I like the saint line, funny cause that was close to someone said on Capital Hill. But yeah, for what it is, it's a good drop.

thanks for the feed. and you're both right. it was keystyle. i should have put a little more into it tho.