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I REALLY fuck with this. The only thing I might've done different is more of a change on the hook. But this is fire regardless. If there was still a monthly hof I'd nominate it.
I liked this bruh … didn’t know ya did audios . I would have threw something on the hook is the only change I would have made .. little reverb maybe a delay on the final word idk but hey it’s your song lol .. cool story and I thought the scheme was cool rhyming the same word for longer periods is something I’m always a fan of the only downside is it can get a bit repetitive if ya don’t switch the flow but I feel it worked well here with the story telling . Overall I liked the song ,good job man ,deff some awesome imagery in here .
Well done my dude
Yeah you guys are right about the hook. What I wanted to do was emphasize the end of the story so that as I progressed through it with each verse, the story itself would become more compelling. But the more I listen to the hook I realize I should have added more to it. Thanks for the feed, I appreciate the listens.