Alright, I can post tonight. right after a meeting I'm freestyling it out
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unless yall wouldnt like me to
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Alright, I can post tonight. right after a meeting I'm freestyling it out
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unless yall wouldnt like me to
Go ahead and post. @143 might wanna stab you for being late but I'm sure he'll let it slide.
Okay I'm here. writing now.
Ok word. @SELF ACTIVATE I'm going to PM you the feedback you left so you can repost as a vote without your post being between drops.
voting today
Notice giving everyone extra day to vote....
Next week focus will be on you....a hint for what is in store......
Also With three weeks left in the season... The top 5 writers will qualify for the Playoff Series and one Underdog draw. The underdog draw will be chosen by OM Mods....
Voted. Fuck I hate voting against anyone in here because everyone is so good haha.
Will vote on last battle and leave feed on no sho in a min but I need help and wouldn't be no one better to go to than you guys. Its about the feed left on my battle. Got no problem w voting or nothing like that. But with the topic being grave to the cradle I was trying to make the overall theme reincarnation without actually using the word. Since no one spoke on that aspect I'm guessin it didn't really hit hard enough to sink in. So why I'm askin for is some pointers on what I could've done to make that come across a little more strong while still being discreet?
Nah, bro. I'm certain everyone came to that conclusion. In fact, I even mentioned it in my feed. Your verse was great.
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Ahhh...wait...I just reread the the quoted lines. I already know where this is headed. You took a literal approach to the topic. This piece is about rebirth, reincarnation, when one dies another is born, the baby is the grandfather...haha...okay, I like this theme. Let's see how well you can pull it off tho.
For me and why I didn't get the reincarnation as in another person but more as in a spiritual was the way you set it up. Because of the personal tones in my experience it clicked more with that. For some if it's something that has a personal resonator within the verse, the reader clicks to that experience to use as a guide for the verse. That's what happen to me and you definitely wrote a dope verse, just Ill added this semi poetic touch to his verse that highlighted the imagery more....
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