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  1. January 2nd, 2004, 08:30 AM #1
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    Cool Brain Stress

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    My mind is overflowed, trapped in an elevated level~of~stress
    Hell constrantly quizzes my mind, Sins are a devilish~test
    My pride grows weary, but I continue on a sullivant~quest
    Fate detereorates my heart, I inherited a delicate~chest
    Now, I lay rampant ferocity over towering my competition
    With flagrant velocity, Kill foes wit no remorseful decisions
    Constant injections of weed recently distored da vision
    All my knowledge locked dowm...Entire resources imprisioned
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  2. January 2nd, 2004, 08:56 AM #2
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    yeah, well vocab overload of complexity which worked..flow was good..all i can advise you on is to use metas and more multis to improve this..it was short yet sweet...
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  3. January 2nd, 2004, 11:48 AM #3
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  4. January 2nd, 2004, 12:31 PM #4
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    Pretty small little verse but not bad.. flow was cool maybe neeed some more wittyness.. better pjunchs n shti but still not bad man.. keep workin at it
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  5. January 2nd, 2004, 12:33 PM #5
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    Thank God For Dictionaries Or You Would Be Stumped
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  6. January 2nd, 2004, 01:05 PM #6
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    Originally posted by Evolve
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    TY for all the feedback guys...

    Does anyone have any last minute feedback before I drop my next drop rhyme.....
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  7. January 2nd, 2004, 01:22 PM #7
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    this was pretty good, some nice lines and some creative thinking a nice way to explain stress, or what not. Some good vocabulary. Nice job.

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    My mind is overflowed, trapped in an elevated level~of~stress
    Hell constrantly quizzes my mind, Sins are a devilish~test

    ^ nice rhyming skills with the multies..

    My pride grows weary, but I continue on a sullivant~quest
    Fate detereorates my heart, I inherited a delicate~chest

    ^ very slick..that second line.."delicate~chest" was extremely smart..

    Now, I lay rampant ferocity over towering my competition
    With flagrant velocity, Kill foes wit no remorseful decisions

    ^ nice wordplay throughout...

    Constant injections of weed recently distored da vision
    All my knowledge locked dowm...Entire resources imprisioned

    ^ nice ending to the drop aswell...

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    I liked the drop as a whole..had a good amount of wordplay but this could have easily been a lot longer...I know you seem like you like writing short samples but if you spent a bit more time you could have made this into a full song cos you've got the right vocanb and also you have a good flow..
    basically..heavy piece..will be watching for your drops..wun
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