Pure Emotion (verbatim & Shawty)

[shawty"B"]

Shawty

do you remember how akward it was that first day
we said anything to make the akward parts just go away
when we got up from that table we were always together
for the next 2 years we thought about.....forever
the fights that we had werent all that bad
but everytime we walked away form it we both of us were sad
all the times that there was weird, silence here and there
but thing always popped up randomly, everywhere
the secrets we share ill never regret saying to you
because deep down i still trust you, hoping you trust me too

after a while one of our fights went too far
it took all i had not to thorw your face into the window of a car
you and your comments were just too mean
some of them were enough to turn ones face green
for so long i stood there looking at you, i was biting my lip
wondering what on earth made you be like this what made you trip?
i hated to tell you that you were'nt the one i knew anymore
i never thought you could break my heart like that, it tore...
i still think of you sometimes wondering where you are
wondering if we had talked about things would they have gone that far?

now a while down the road after school is through i get a letter from you
telling me about all you felt when it all happened and some how i kno its true
but after i read your letter once i read it again and again whishing it was wrong
i still loved you and i always will though all my life only i never told you for so long
in my wildest dreams i never thought you would take it so fas as to stop
im begging and pleading with you...dont let this be your last drop
so many people love all that you write, your flows and how you just are
please......dont take it this far...

Verbatim

since y'all wanted an encore, i'll give ya one more
i'm droppin "pure emotion", that ya just can't ignore
y'all know me, well atleast for the last few years
from happy times, to admitting all my worst fears
but i ain't got no more to say, i told all my truths
from broken hearts, to denying secrets when there's no proof
droppin poetic pieces from rhymes to haiku's
all with emotion y'all can probly relate too
My life is like a game, and all games need to be played
whether it's writing lyrics on a page or gettin betrayed
poetry is just my way to get my anger and emotions released
this right here, keeps me from the rage being increased
but as i said before, i ain't got no more to say i'm done
just had to drop one last one...and "B" thanks a ton
for letting me unleash all of my final thoughts
finally i'm done, while doin what i was taught

[Dirty Sanchez]

meh......first was better than the second. i liked the idea of the first but the second was dull. not bad...elevate more

6/10

[shawty"B"]

uppin...

[Ace of Aces]

nice piece i'd say. both came good.

Shawty- you did a great job on the imagery aspect of your verse. even tho your words were sumwut simple, you potrayed the pictures wit excellence. the structure and flow was good in places, but could be improved a little. this topic is common, but you potrayed yours differently to an extent. nice job on that. keep it up.

Verbatim- your strongest was your flow, even tho it was a little choppy. came with a lot of description though, even if you lacked imagery. your structure was good, but you tended to switch it which mixed ur flow a bit. but overall, good job. both came good. props.

peace

[Perpetual]

word^^^^^^^
it wasnt the best
but i think ya could've used more imagery

verbatim'sw looked more like a poem with the almost equal syllables on each line

bot bad, keep it up

[Blitzkrieger]

good imagery in this peice in my opinion. I could feel some emotion too. Not too strong in vocabulary, but It was still good. I enjoyed. Keep it up.

pz

[shawty"B"]

thnx every1...uppin

[Verbatim]

thanks y'all

uppin

[shawty"B"]

yo.....upppin this peice pplz!!!!!!!!