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  1. July 31st, 2004, 05:07 PM #1
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    depression

    I Cut Myself, To Feel The Pain
    The Pain In Which, Keeps Me Sane
    I Know You Hate It, As Do I
    It's My Way Of Getting Thru It, Times I Want 2 Die
    I Want 2 Stop, I've Really Tried
    But When I See The Blood, I Feel Sooo Alive
    And I Know U Say, If I Want 2 Cut And Bleed
    To Come 2 You, For The Shoulder I Need
    But It's So Hard 4 Me, To Let My Feelings Out
    I Wont Be Able To Do It,
    Although My Heart Screams And Shoutz
    You Dont Understand It, And I Dont Expect U To
    But Sometimes I Just Fuckin Cant Take This Shit,
    So I Do What I Got To Do
    I Hate To See You Hurt, Same With U And I
    But Our Hurtz Are So Different, The Question Is Why
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  2. July 31st, 2004, 05:15 PM #2
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  3. August 3rd, 2004, 03:21 AM #3
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    And for the sake of all of us, will you please cut deeper? Y'know what your problem is? You don't have a job. Get a fucking job.
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  4. August 3rd, 2004, 12:32 PM #4
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    Face this was pretty emotional but you lacked alot of description and imagery. I think that would have made this piece alot stronger but it was decent none the less.
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  5. August 3rd, 2004, 02:33 PM #5
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    lichwise......i do have a job....i do drywall and i work 14hours a day you idiot... Damn shut up before you are made to look stupid

    uppin for some more feedback
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  6. August 3rd, 2004, 02:34 PM #6
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    keep in mind that this is not a true poem it is just a poem about my friend that used to cut.....
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  7. August 3rd, 2004, 03:40 PM #7
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    Nothing very great. Cutting, depression, sadness. No real twist to it. Same as all the other "im sad im giving up on life" pieces. IF you want to write something readers will love, you have to put a twist and imagination in it. This is just like all the other Depression poems, not really any different.
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  8. August 3rd, 2004, 05:11 PM #8
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    this wasnt the bes of all poems that ive seen from you, but its good to me...the reason being, i can completely relate to this...im just about every way.

    keep droppin
    return tha favor

    ....bless

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  9. August 6th, 2004, 09:05 AM #9
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    Keep in mind people except me are too nice to say you suck.
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  10. August 6th, 2004, 11:45 AM #10
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    Well...what this lacked in words it made up for in emotional content...was kinda simple in the scheme...but...myself speaking...when you're that low thats about as deep as you really want...so...i hope all is well with friend and I'll be looking for more from ya...short and sweet...this was a decent read...pz

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  11. August 8th, 2004, 03:09 AM #11
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    LichWise... If i suck why dont you just look at my others at the top of the page... A Thousand Wishes and Finality

    then tell me i suck you fucking bitch
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