User Tag List

View Poll Results: WHAT DO YALL HOMIES THINK

Voters
4. You may not vote on this poll
  • TIGHT

    0 0%
  • ALLRIGHT

    3 75.00%
  • DONT KARE

    0 0%
  • SUX

    1 25.00%
Multiple Choice Poll.
Page 1 of 2 1 2 LastLast
Showing results 1 to 15 of 19

Thread: HIGH AS F*** Part 1 and 2

  1. #1
    shyboi
    Guest

    HIGH AS F*** Part 1 and 2

    High ass f*** Part 1 by Shy Boi

    lost in a dream no one to wake me up,
    gott the liquer in the bottle pour me cup,
    dreamin lost in the harsh reality life sux,
    stack bread shit my pockets no bux,
    so yes im poor pheanin for sume food and water,
    socidey pushed to the edge now wont even bother,
    to pick me up and help me out this hole,
    just handin me the crack pipe sayin die slow,
    just like they did to the rest of the minorities in this nation,
    gettin us killed with no hesitation,
    feelin like suicide is the way to go now,
    so i guess ill be happy 6ft under ground,
    so i lace up the mary jane,
    pheanin for suthin just to ease my pain,
    so oi take a hit let the smoke hit lungs,
    wish we could live happy and lay down the guns,
    no where to go just some empty space,
    if i die now i hope youll remember my face,
    got the glock pointed to my temple trigga finger hevey,
    pushin 90 on the freeway wit my chevey,
    blunt in my hand burnin the wheel,
    at least when i die i wont feel,
    the agony of takin another life,
    just pray its not ur kids or wife,
    but be fore i crash,
    my gun will go blast,
    but i stop cuz my baby grls face pops up in my head,
    stop thinkin shed grow up wrong if i was dead,
    so creap to a stop and jst suck in the smoke,
    thought i was to strong to choke,
    but i go home here sume shit cumin from my the kiitchen,
    so i just stop and listen,
    i here my bitch moanin and here the baby screamin,
    so i rush in wit my eye gleamin,

    High as F*** Part 2 Shy Boi

    see this fool all up on my chick,
    look at her she was full of the dick,
    i pull out the gat and yell what the fuck,
    so i poped that nigga then throughum in the truck,
    flead to the lake wit my bitch tied up in the back seat,
    that fool is in the bed i can hearin stompin his feet,
    so i well quit kickin or ur done now,
    that nigga wont calm down,
    so stop go out to the back and pistle whip his shitn
    then out pops the clip,
    i see a car speedin up my way,
    here the shots ringin from a fuckin AK,
    i get down pop in a clip 16 buddys yellin let me go,
    1 shot 2 shot next one waitin to leave the hole,
    see um cum close stop and get out,
    grap his ak and nock him the fuck out,
    i feel a sharp pain hit the pack of my head,
    shit im hit but i dont think im dead,
    that grazed me but im still fightin back,
    grap the glock let it click clack,
    so i see the other nigga comin round the side,
    rushin to hop up in his ride,
    ahh fuck it start shootin and i the sirens,
    stop put ur hands down thats when bullets start flyin,
    i get hit and i say fuck im done,
    cuz now im on my neez prayin to god like a catholic nun,
    looks like its death or jail,
    well shit i aint gettin locked up so this be thend of my tail.



    2 LINKS

    1. http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=240847

    2. http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=242986

  2. #2
    shyboi
    Guest
    uppin this shit tell me what yall think ight holla

  3. #3
    shyboi
    Guest
    cumon uppin this i need feed back

  4. #4
    .
    Join Date
    Sep 2005
    Age
    34
    Posts
    194
    Battle Record
    5-5
    this was aiihgt, i liked the topic it was cool and dope

    work on strucutre and flow and coplexity

    up your complexity and vocab..aiight drop

    keep elevating..peace homie

  5. #5
    Banned
    Join Date
    Oct 2003
    Posts
    5,480
    Battle Record
    12-1
    ^ agree with lyric....up your vocab..good rhymes...topic was cool..i was feelin it..work on flow and strucutre..aiight peace

  6. #6
    shyboi
    Guest
    thanx homies good shit good shit

  7. #7
    Banned Zone's Avatar
    Join Date
    Sep 2005
    Location
    SouthSide Queens
    Age
    34
    Posts
    255
    i agree 100% wit lyric, you gotta really work structure

  8. #8
    shyboi
    Guest
    thanx

  9. #9
    !.VeRbZ.!
    Guest
    lol....who polled sux


    neways it was aiight u need to up ya vocab n add complexity...........don't be so simple with it....

  10. #10
    shyboi
    Guest
    ight thanx g

  11. #11
    shyboi
    Guest
    need more uppin this ight holla

  12. #12
    Used to love H.E.R
    Join Date
    Aug 2004
    Age
    37
    Posts
    649
    Battle Record
    0-3
    up your vocab, sort your spelling, try keep same syllable length bars and this will be alot better.

  13. #13
    shyboi
    Guest
    ight thanx homie uppin it yall

  14. #14
    Banned
    Join Date
    Jan 2004
    Location
    Montreal
    Age
    36
    Posts
    3,428
    Battle Record
    14-7
    Things to work on:

    1. Spelling. easy shit. Just run your piece through a spellcheck. It may not seem like a big deal, but it pisses people off to see tonnes of bad spelling, and it makes your piece more polished if its all spelled right.

    2. Vocab: Your piece was too simple for my liking. You don't need dictionary rap, just work on your vocab to make it less boring.

    3. Subject Matter: Yea..this was too basic, and its been done before.

    Don't worry about structure. Don't listen to these herbs. Structure don't matter if you got good content.

    PZ

  15. #15
    shyboi
    Guest
    thanx dawg uppin

Similar Threads

  1. Replies: 3
    Last Post: May 6th, 2006, 02:02 PM
  2. Quick shit in class high as fuck part 1
    By shyboi in forum Open Mic
    Replies: 2
    Last Post: October 26th, 2005, 07:51 PM
  3. Heist Investigation (High tale it) Part. 1
    By M Pulsive in forum Open Mic
    Replies: 11
    Last Post: April 14th, 2005, 11:03 AM
  4. Replies: 36
    Last Post: September 7th, 2002, 11:22 PM

Posting Rules

  • You may not post new threads
  • You may not post replies
  • You may not post attachments
  • You may not edit your posts
  •