Deaf Ears

[Brandon Cee]

Deaf Ears

I'm disgraced by the faith inside
I replace my mind with a great design
Just expect to feel what's left is real
Respect the seal and accept the deal
Connect with real thoughts
expect to build plots
reject the skills taught
and be normal and informal for a few days
you say
that it is too long
so move on - produce songs
while we try to feed and torture
the disorder in this order of white America
while they try scaring ya
into believing the wrongest truth
in hopes of making robots of all of you
and you can call it rude
but it won't stall the proof
from showing up after
creating disaster - faster
than a master craftsman
with a trademarked reaction
to the actions of a "has been"
that's never around to do truth
but in such clever ways this dude proves
that we should live today - yesterday's past hurt
live in ways to leave this reality backwards
Why's it okay for us to lie with fables and suffer?
While these people just try to label their brothers
No way to recover what's be shown to the Earth
Capturing lives and now their even owning your words
Wholly obsurd! I can't believe what I'm hearing
I'm speaking so clearly, but can't help anyone near me
I'm amazed at ways people are running away
with something to speak and nothing to say
They bluff to your face, you'll accept the fate
And they'll be mad, so you gotta expect the hate
But I regret the fake
and I expect to take
some action today
instead of just sitting here alone
some say
I'm totally wrong
so expose of me God - I ain't suppose to be fraud
Materialistic sets burial wishes aside
hoping we'll find a way to own it in time
I'm not condoning with pride
I'm just stuck here feeling all alone in this fight
I can't be hurt and God knows it's actually true
I ain't lighting it up, that's what you casually do
Habits can prove that we humans are weak
We'd watch our mouths if we could view it from our teeth

Pop Culture has Deaf Ears

[Brandon Cee]

dude fuck you guys.

[Poeta Demonio]

I liked the piece, i had meaning, and the voice you were speaking in was really nice tonally... emotion wise it definitely there, and imagery wise i was kind of feeling it, although i think you need to work on the wording you use to describe what you're trying to say, seeing as at times i seemed like meaning was being sacrificed for a rhyme scheme, which personally i don't really get into as much. Hence the reason in my pieces i keep a flow, but not a rhyming flow, as then i can place the exact word i want to say rather than searching for a word that would rhyme and slightly be applicable. But alot of people are into the rhyming poetry thing. Either way it was well written and i'm pretty impressed with your progression in poetry dude. so yeah, hit up my piece "roots don't grow in sand"... Thanks bro.

[Brandon Cee]

Thanks Poeta. I hit your piece. Up.

[I Am]

Loved The Flow

I'm disgraced by the faith inside
I replace my mind with a great design
Just expect to feel what's left is real
Respect the seal and accept the deal

Also

into believing the wrongest truth
in hopes of making robots of all of you
and you can call it rude
but it won't stall the proof

And Finally

I can't be hurt and God knows it's actually true
I ain't lighting it up, that's what you casually do
Habits can prove that we humans are weak
We'd watch our mouths if we could view it from our teeth


The wording was really nice through a extremly large portion of the piece. The lines I posted were by far the best lines in the piece. All in all, I really enjoyed this read. And can't wait to see you post more work in the forum. Hit up either "Breach of Pain" or if you're a IJL member please go check out my tryout. Thanks for the read.

[Key™]

This was well written, at points some of the sentences werent focus as others that stood out, i think u also focused more on the rhyming patern. but i liked it