Venting my feelings

[Kandlestic]

The rap world cold and so is the net
Like rapbattles.com will show no respect
Gotta earn love like the owner of a pet
Ask for critiquing and the moderator ain't speaking
Try to elevate And still they they wanna hate
You not diddy not walking out of town for cheese cake
Give me a break where I live the rappers be fake
Ever heard of the D-Day retirement home for elders
production and fast food is all you can do
So basically I'm asking you to help me out please
Yeah I graduated without honors but still I need
A reason to prceed with my childhood dream
Maybe it's cause I'm inspired by the wackest emcees
They make me feel good When I listen to them speak
I know I'm way better then they
But someone told me to give rhyming a break
I did then I lost all of my talent
Slowly on a scale my weight I find it
Silent to the world like ferraris when they roar

[Shotty Fullclip]

ill be completely honest with you.... this piece needs some work. you need to bring some multi's to the table, or something. thats about the only advice i can give you, and maybe try and keep your bars the same length. it makes your flow sound much better.... ill see you around, but for now.. im out

[Kandlestic]

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