Be who you wanna Be

[SickNigga]

 
Be  who  you  wanna  Be
Do  whatever you  gotta  Do
Mean  While  Imma  kick  it  here  with Lucifer and smoke a bowl or 2
Slang  Dope, Change the game
I am higher than school breaking all the Rules
Gang  Banging  on  Crews 
Slapping the Fuck outta Whom ever
I choose, Abuse the Win becuase I Loose Not
My Niggas Retreive 
Clues - Blast Doodes - and - Drink Booze!
Dwelling within Dynamic success 
Recieving  blow  jobs
from the mouth of Satanic  protest like a bloody tampon
The whole Campaign is Left a Mess - This is not a test
but better yet A Warning shot In the form of a threat
I water Ski niggaz wet pull triggerz and demolish sets
In debt with no Cash = DEATH
IMMA
GO SMOKE SOME METH
AND SAY FUCK ALL YOU GUYS I GUESS

STUCK INSIDE A ENERGY POOL
FULL OF FOOLS - SHADOWS
IN THE FORM OF 
BLACK PLAYDOW - LIKE THO
SIKES - BEING LIES -
AND THE TRUTH INSIDE MY EYES
WRONGS AND RIGHTS ON TRIAL
BOMB DOPE BONGS AND DEADLY SONGS
SNIFFING
MY HOMIES SISTERS DIRTY THONG
GETTING MY MOTHERFUKING DICK SUCKED IN HONG KONG

[fazeT]

this was all over the place, like tryna put together a puzzle,
lyrically, dog, you need a muzzle, your thoughts are all jumbled,
besides that, it sorta had a cool flow goin, and the story was iiight
Stick to normal text color, this format is a strain on the eyes
but overall a decent drop for a frist timer
stay up and return feed!!!!

[®andom]

The opener was the only thing I was head bangin to.

[SickNigga]

i m still figuring out how to post and look how i wanna...thanks tho...

[Isaiah Thomas]

Yup this was all over the place again haha but better, flow was cool, keep at it, don't forget those links haha

Peace.

[lyrical-assassin]

my rymes are so sick i have 2 tell em 2 behave
yours are shit u probly got elvis turnin in his grave
i know who u r a black man wanna be
u cant be nuffink ur not a home boy like me
cuz im worse than nwa
cuz im around nd im here 2 stay
cuz 2 me ur harmless
try take me ull end up arm-less
ill cut u like pieces of threads
get chopped by me nd lose ya legs
cuz im satan reincoranate
so fight me nd ill demonstate
im a legend sick are my rymes
there so good they culd be crimes
you say u famous but u only famous where u buy the dope
imma design ya face wid a collidascope
cuz your rymes are so dope
ill give u a choice gun shot or hung wiv a rope
cuz theres no way out
cuz imma destroy u wiv ma killah clout
cuz u cn mess wiv da gangstas gee
when really u the 1 who gt the H.I.V
cuz imma killu wiv the knife i bought frm u
fuck ths shit ur rymes is thru

[Foreshadow]

I thought that the opener was nice but other then that I'm not sure sure about the rest of it

[Esc0BosS]

naah son... wtf about tha opener?... this whole shit was whack including tha opener

[The Genesis]

ehh, shit needs some serious work, don't post in black font again, but in regards to just the lyrics it's not horrible, just keep writing and elevating until you find your niche.

[C.A.M]

you need some elevation, need to work on everything, multis structure metas basically just look around at other peoples shit and get a basic feel for how rap is supposed to look