Strings of the Puppeteer

[Rosetti Frost]

they control your thoughts and your overall dreams
power is what they crave to enslave human beings
putrid sounds as they drowned the souls that scream
have you bound on the ground so profound that it seems
its extreme...the way they spread hate and propaganda
expand your thoughts so they can kill and give you cancer
whats the answer...so evil they control all your actions
transactions and fractions so they can predict your reactions
distractions feeding off the harsh reality of human interaction
anxiety is what they use against you for they're own satisfaction
your heart is pounding as they sit back and desecrate your culture
rapeing your inahbition as if they were a savage or a vulture
it hurts ya they'll try to convert ya to converse with perverts
they'll desert ya then eat away at your insides like desserts
alerts................to put you all back on the right track
the puppeteer controls us all and there's nothing we can do about that

[Rosetti Frost]

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[Rosetti Frost]

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[Rosetti Frost]

uppin.........

[Rosetti Frost]

damn no feed at all...........anything good or bad

[Sting3r]

Damn, I unknowingly wrote into this concept..
im about to drop it..

any ways, i'm thinking you should have gone more into detail with the topic..
and this definitely needs some multi's to spice it up..

but i didn't mind the short read..
keep it up

[Isaiah Thomas]

This was cool, the flow was off in some places but it was a quick/good read

No real stand out lines because they all meshed together nicely but I did see one thing I would of differently

alerts................to put you all back on the right track
the puppeteer controls us all and there's nothing we can do about that

I would of changed 'nothing we can do about that' into 'nothing we can do to fight back'
to make it rhyme more with the previous line since you know right/fight. don't this as hate or anything, lookin forward to reading more.

peace.

[verbalweaponz]

7/10

yeah man..nice consistent throughout-- you stayed on message. as far as trying to give feedback on the flow...only you know how it flows, so saying the "flow was off" can't be determined.

good shit.

[Westcoast]

You stayed consistent through the whole verse. You stayed on topic and used good vocabulary. But I suggest you try using more multie's and get into it a little more detailed and the piece itself should be DOPE.

[Crookshank]

This was some shit right here, I liked it. Strings of the Puppeteer was a good title to... but as for the drop... It was pretty good. Nothing spectacular but you stayed on topic and talked about the the verse was meant to be, at least according to the title. I would give it a 7.5/10. keep writing n spittin' man. you seem to have potential. id appreciate some feed on "Realm of the Wicked & Wise" stay up

[Esc0BosS]

...smh...i think this is a pretty dope piece...tru it is lacking multiz but its still on some lyrical shit...
tru only you know how its gonna flow, but to me it seems on point...
and it aint nothin having a good vocab if u cant place the words correctly, and in this piece the use of vocab was nice as fuck...good topic to write on, good execution of the topic...

i will agree with reflex tho...u coulda gone more in depth with this, but as it stands with tha legnth its a solid drop

and real talk its hard to pick out stand out lines in a piece like this because its more about tha overall message...but

whats the answer...so evil they control all your actions
transactions and fractions so they can predict your reactions
distractions feeding off the harsh reality of human interaction

^^ thats a fuckin quotable for ya lol

overall solid shit, enjoyed tha read...stay up #1

[Rosetti Frost]

thanks for the feed everyone who did.............................

[C.A.M]

this was decent. if you throw some metas and work on the structure a bit then it woulda been great