star killa

[connecticunt]

i stand out in a crowd like a dykk at a bike show
put me on stage and ill tear up the mic yo
i got three legs like im riding a trike tho
i spit on nasty beats like a chick on a dick blows
oh no, its your go, im out there in the ozone
i smoked that shit strait to my head now im so gone
to fucked up to drive home so who knows
ur so weak, and i hate yall faggots
i roll strapped so u better ride wit flak jackets
this shits mind control out of the speaker
my words are like a bullet, nah better yet a heat seeker
my mouth is like a cannon, its just one of my many features
many people have influenced me, but dont call them teachers
im strait out of the game, coming from under the bleachers
u from under my feat, ill kill all of u creatures
i speak with divine wisdom call me a preacher
my words rise up, urs fall like the economy
i single u out in the night, like stars in astronomy

[kami.kaze]

this was alright pretty elementary good flow good structure kinda liked the metas you need more multis, and some more internals

u from under my feat, ill kill all of u creatures
i speak with divine wisdom call me a preacher
my words rise up, urs fall like the economy
i single u out in the night, like stars in astronomy

i liked those there were pretty cool, just work on your internals and multis and some more figurative laguage and you will get better over time keep writin
anyways rtf, http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...in-390964.html

(by the way you need two links you've posted on or your topic will be closed i suggest you read the rules before posting another topic, not tryin to hate just lettin you know)

[connecticunt]

thanks

[kami.kaze]

no problem hit up my topic and leave some feed please