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Blynd
Naive
10 lines
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get in soon as you can. (24 hrs max)
This is my check
"A Poem can curve
Like the bell of a tulip
Or a pistol grip"
-Joel Dias-Porter
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Yo rookie, lookie over here; you think you got nothing to fear
50 posts- last time I checked you still haven't done shit
stop running your mouth off acting like you something legit
Fuck it or fight it, spit it or write it, you still can't beat me
Take your notebook and light it; hopes, dreams, aspirations ignited
With a name like naive you can judge this book by his cover
Trying to write witty lines living at home with his mother
Claims he can KO Arch, don't you all think he probably could
Just like pigs fly out of my ass and I'm straight outta the hood
The battles over, the message is sent, I win, TNL represent
"A Poem can curve
Like the bell of a tulip
Or a pistol grip"
-Joel Dias-Porter
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"A Poem can curve
Like the bell of a tulip
Or a pistol grip"
-Joel Dias-Porter
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another quickie. (been dumb busy)"A Poem can curve
Like the bell of a tulip
Or a pistol grip"
-Joel Dias-Porter
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B you been a victim. Your wrong doing's, aren't worth covering for.
I guess that's why .Sandman. couldn't imagine tulips on his - other than yours.
You're a disgrace, you make everyone look bad in the community.
If you think you're sick. Nobody believes who you presume to be.
My line's cold as fuck. punches to the body leave u wit frozen guts.
split your thorax, until your heart spills and forces you to open up.
I'll son him, so this battle shows.. I' willingly accepted this bastard.
To show him I'll dig his grave, and he can just step in it after.
Because I hate your concepts, I really want to sever your brain.
It might help. But, you being garbage... that's never gonna change.
Thanks for the extension.
Originally Posted by Blynd
Blynd homie u write to much like its a poem, you have no punches landing, your just making fun of him in a way that does no damage
you have to make him look like a bad rapper, and diss him hard at the same time
I quoted this as ur best line though
Yo naive, ur verse was way better then i've seen u before.... but you can tell it was a quick key.. you have dope ideas, but you didnt' execute them as they should have been
That tulip worplay was sick but it didn't hit
you had alot like theis that had sick wordplay and set up but didn't hit
your presume to be line was ok, but i didn't quote it cuz it didn't hit as hard as i know you can land punches
V Naive for having an all around better verse besides also only having 1 quote
Please RTF - http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...09#post7888709
Thanks for the vote, E.
IMO Naive came harder with punches and flow.
v/ Naive
-vote DQ'd
Last edited by KnowP; November 7th, 2010 at 11:37 AM
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B you been a victim. Your wrong doing's, aren't worth covering for.
I guess that's why .Sandman. couldn't imagine tulips on his - other than yours.
(i also liked the open up flip, but wasnt fire enough to be a quotable)
blynd. you sound like an open mic, you're not doing any damage to your opponent, and it weakens your concepts a huge deal. for punches and a good multi, naive gets my vote.
v/naive
Thanks for voting.
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"A Poem can curve
Like the bell of a tulip
Or a pistol grip"
-Joel Dias-Porter
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Lmao, stick to poetry & topicals Blynd fam haha. Yeah man, an easy decision to make here. Not giving a big expo or shit cos Blynd already knows he lost lol. Naive had the tulip line which was average but best of both verses so he gets this one.
-vote DQ'd
Last edited by KnowP; November 7th, 2010 at 11:35 AM
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Originally Posted by .SandMan.
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My line's cold as fuck. punches to the body leave u wit frozen guts.
split your thorax, until your heart spills and forces you to open up.
Because I hate your concepts, I really want to sever your brain.
It might help. But, you being garbage... that's never gonna change.
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nada
blyd hardly had a rhyme scheme let alone any punches. nuthin witty or eye catchin from him. naive had some solid shots to the body. that heart/open up bar was fire and he pretty owned blynds whole verse with that punch.
v/ naive
Imo....
Blynd, you structure this too much like poetry or Open mic, you gotta try n rhyme set-up with punchline each time, cause I wasnt feelin half of your verse for that reason alone.. Other times it was just the punches you dropped were lame or just played out, like your 2nd bar... work on that rhyming shit and up your punchline game...
Naive, you had a few okay bars, nothing THAT special it seemed... But you did have that bar about garbage was really the best one you had, didnt really see much else.. Looked rushed as fuck tho... but you got this for hitting him wit one more clean punch, thats jjst my opinion tho.
V/Naive . Hit up the battle vs. Geekdude
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