unplugged

[Jukon]

powered down
and unplugged.
you wrap the cord
around my wrists.
bound- a tied on frown.
I tried to drown
in your tears,
but they woke me.
unspoken, your lips
sealed tight.
your cheeks
seem to crack
as I force a smile.
painting red cheeks
with fingerprints.
tattooed with bruises
and scrapes
that dwell inside.
because from out here

I still see your shine.

[Emily]

powered down
and unplugged. nice
you wrap the cord
around my wrists. interesting wording here
bound- a tied on frown. good imagery
I tried to drown
in your tears, nice line.
but they woke me. and? snapped you into reality?
unspoken, your lips
sealed tight. The quiet essence has been drawn nicely here
your cheeks
seem to crack
as I force a smile. its obvious you're/she's going against the grain. anything forced is no gain.
painting red cheeks
with fingerprints.
tattooed with bruises
and scrapes
that dwell inside. Right. I like this. Bet you knew I'd like this.
because from out here

I still see your shine. nice
Bruises, and tats of hurt, and blood and scrapes, but you still see the shine.
Maybe that's part of her shine?
Or maybe you're able to see past that, and still see the shine?

Regardless, I'm glad someone sees the shine.
The way you've depicted her here, I doubt she sees it.
A little hope where there is none, it seems.
A little light where there is darkness.
A little love where is no self love.

That shine goes a long way.


I love it.


Thank you.

[OG Maestro]

"tattooed with bruises" damnnn, bro. that really hit me hard right there.
I didn't think this poem would make me think much, by how small it appears. But it's some interesting things being said.
At first I was thinking this was about love/abusive, and then I saw what looks like iPhone/android references.
Like, the cracks and fingerprints and the whole "unplugged" "powered down" phrases started to make me think you were talking about the allure of a device.

I'm honestly not sure, after reading this a few times but I'd like to hear what inspired this when you get a chance because I liked what you were doing @Jukon

[Fatrick Swayze]

Yeah this short line style suits you very well juju bean.

Couple of nice phrases in theere. The bruises line and the last line
And profoundly written. The problem with this short style is that
It leaves for wanting so most people end up writing epics lol.

Nice drop bruh