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Last edited by Illus'; November 23rd, 2008 at 02:53 PM
Oh yes...don't sleep I know it's somewhat long...but reading is fundamental...and I am dope...lol
peace!!
uppin........ Read you lazy Bastards.
Ok I critiqued two drops I can atleast get two critiques,,,
uppin
Aight Bio this was nice
Vocab....you showed some complex vocab in parts and were a little simplistic in some other parts...overall this was good tho
Imagry....this was pretty good...I got nice mental images from the heart exploding out the spleen line lol...good job
Emotion...I thought you hit on this well...could venting piece I thought
Overall this was a good drop buddy..keep at it
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Thanks for hitting this up Lyric..other kats on this site stay sleeping don't recognize skills...haters...
I will hit up yours..
peace
i liked the concept of the three verses,, more creative than just voicing anger... i liked how it builds, the first verse setting the schene sorta thing, then building up, then calming down....
.. the scheme you used flipped around a bit, maybe could have kept it more consistant.... but good use of internals.... some decent immagery in there too......... good job
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I liked you put this peice into three sections. It was imagery which made this peice better. I never read the first 1 so if you still have the link i would like to read it. Good vocabulary . Multis were good which made the flow better.
Good peice
Could you hit up 1 in my sig
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