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Last edited by doesnotexist; November 28th, 2004 at 03:29 AM
First off.. this sounds like something Eminem would write.. Emotion was present, could`ve been a little stronger.. Flow was solid.. the struture was eww, serious.. flow was off in some parts because of the 'ewww' structure.. the little pause in the middle was pretty cool, added something to the piece.. didn`t like the overall feel of this though.. but I know what you were aiming at.. a piece about hating a woman.. so you hit the topic well.. props for that.. keep dropping man.. improve on structure and flow and you`ll have some great pieces for sure.. Pz.
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Ehh, could have used a little better words here and there, but overall, you did a pretty nice job. I thought you presented your point well and you really showed some emotions that were key. Nice job.
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Originally Posted by FormulaMC
GODDAMIT I HATE EMINEM! LOL
this was actualy one of the first topical things I ever wrote so considering i thought it was ok. thanks for the feedback
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