v/ Spitfury
well - both you guys had such simple ways of stating things, ie:
"And now, my life is forever changed. And I am now known for being brave"
^there's no emotion in that - it's so dry and sterile - need to spice it up some...
flow was kinda iffy in both too - takes on the topic were nothing surprising - Spit's was a little bit more emotional so I guess that tips things in his favor - keep working at it guys
peace
cut us some slack
he's rusty and im new to it
Ya Dig?!
I'm not trying to insult you or anything - just giving you some advice so you'll keep getting better...
^Was my teacher Lol. And the Preason is 2 weeks Spit.
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iLLunatic i wasnt keen on your flow and line length, it threw me reading it.... aside from that it was a good job... the story was decent
spit, i liked your approach more, and i thought the scheme of writing was more preferable to my liking... i could get into it more...
so im voting spit... the overall feel of the verse seemed to hit better....
...ok work from both
oh,, could you both hit my match...... thnx
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no doubt, i wont vote cuz u dropped late but i'll give my opinion once i read it
Ya Dig?!
Fucka long explanation.
V/Spitfury
Reason - Fucka long explanation.
Nah j/p fools, coo drop, I felt Spit Fury took more time and wanted it to be dope coz it's his 1st topical, coo drop son. ILL I seen better from you, but it was still a coo drop, know you can do better though son.
V/Spitfury yo
Spit Fury won.
Closed.
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