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not bad man...you do need to elevate your multis and your vocab..you got potential and your gettin better.....your rhyme scheme was off a little on and off through out your piece..all in all though...not a bad piece....keep elevatin and droppin.~1`
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thanx for feedback man. upping/
You are good for a beginner, work in some creativity and I see some serious potential. I think you could work on the wording of your lines a little better, because some are a little "ehhh." You did have imagery which is important in Open Mics, and topicals, but there is always room for improvement there. Also try not to repeat the title so much in yours bars, because then you get this repetitive feeling when reading, and sometimes the reader will lose interest.
Solid drop for a beginner.
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i think this was an ok drop.. of course it could have a lil more punch and some creative wordplay that seperate it from other open mics.. the topic was in ok topic but not great .. if i had to rate it it would be a 7.2 drop.. holla back
alright thanx u 2 ill holla back thanx for feedback
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Word, I was just about to say that. Try to make your lines even.Originally Posted by XxPHATExX
thanx for feedback i appreciate it i made a 2nd piece
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