Gonna be a G

[kmazhvtk]

Gonna B a G

One Day I will b a G with M fuckin master degrees
One day I will b a G with ma own custom Bentley
One day I will b a G with stacks of money
One day I will b a G with ma own firearm gallery

I will come in ma car that is bullet-proof
And when I open da roof
Gangsters will run cause of ma rustproof
machetes and blades that will stick in whom
I beef With cause they woof woof
On whatever I do cause of their jealousy
So Gs will watch out for me cause their weapons are just brooms
Compared to mine nd if they mess around too much
Ill bomb on them-- boom boom.

(chorus)

I will b da G with a master degree in biology
Cause it will teach me 2 use ma weapons effectively
I will b da G with a master degree in law successfully
To get around all da laws ever made skilfully
It will give me a chance 2 use ma skills 2 bully
All da m fucker who bullied me when I was silly
But now it is their opportunity 2 look silly
Cause they will be begging for their lives - man u get me

There will be women all around me
Who will b ready 2 do anything with me
But if they fuck with me for ma enemy
They will b wiped outta this world eternally
But ill b there for her who’s always with me
and da devil who fucks with her is fuckin with me
Ill keep a close watch on him regularly
And da moment he does something his heads blowing up instantly

(chorus)

I will be having beef with po po unceasingly,
Cause I will b doing everything including drugs exceptionally
The po po will give me a reservation
In jail; thinking they can get me their there without frustration
Ill be like P Didy in his video running from da cop helis dodging thru all the ammunition
But those m fucker will never get me the reservation
Cause there will b fifty people to cover 4 all ma confessions.

All da Gs will b looking 4 a chance 2 gun me
And they will be sending me death threats to scare me
But I’m da mastermind so I read their mind; bitch, I’m da last of the dying kind
So ill bomb them with all da scams that I have planned
And instead of death threats I’ll show them how 2 die
I will be target practising on those m fuckers until they cry
I will teach them I am one of a kind and
Make them wish they never played with da mastermind.

All u m fuckin G’s wait 4 me da real m fuckin G- Da mastermind
I will come downtown to see ya all
So you beta get ready for me
Cause when I come da real game’s on
If any m fuckin Gs got offended by this
Well I am happy to inform you; I don’t give a fuck
So fuck u all m fuckers

[P. Mortuus]

Quite good, a lot of self glorification but still quite good, found som lines humerous as not in circus humour but Thug humour, keep it poppin'

[kmazhvtk]

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...=1#post3456089

first 2nd will be on soon

[P. Mortuus]

Shit our Ip's were the same in the first messages,
Check out the six senses crew area and drop a good 10 lines

[Johnny 6-feet]

1 line of feedback isn't decent feedback, comment on the writers choice of topic, use of vocab and imagery, and the rhyme scheme. Put in 2 links you've left decent feedback on or this will get closed.

[kmazhvtk]

http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthre...=1#post3461146
replacement for 1st 1

[jake]

..to Be honest i Found The whole Piece A bit.....Basic...The vcab that you used was Basic, Which Leads to a Basic rhyme scheme, Which Leads to a basic flow...< This Had All Of these....So i Wasnt Really Feelin It, Apart From The Humour, Like Stated above....Overall - 3/10...keep writing tho, and try to broaden vocab aight....1

[kmazhvtk]

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...78#post3461578

[kmazhvtk]

..to Be honest i Found The whole Piece A bit.....Basic...The vcab that you used was Basic, Which Leads to a Basic rhyme scheme, Which Leads to a basic flow...< This Had All Of these....So i Wasnt Really Feelin It, Apart From The Humour, Like Stated above....Overall - 3/10...keep writing tho, and try to broaden vocab aight....1

thnk for ur honest opinion m8. i just strted writin lyrics this month. so im new 2 this stuff so it'll tke me sme time 2 improve.