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Thread: Breathless Thoughts

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    Exclamation Breathless Thoughts

    I originally did this in a battle let me know what you think....... It was under my Papa Smurf name


    Shattered mind with a violent Statement
    So silent, but viciously it Settles
    tonight we will see the harsh reality
    of what the true cold, fogs up


    Men surrendered in war wit a gat and a busted knuckle
    Quietly abused as rain pours cryin as their kneees buckle
    Shattered state of mind, with contiplating emotions
    as men sit wit compulsive compulsions they erode with erosions
    no protection with trojans, but dramatically woken
    Breathless thoughts in the mind, but no words spoken
    Vomitin and chokin, but ur sickness is not a disease
    its wut builds up inside, and has u drop to your knees

    As you cautiously move, nerves bust with confusion
    in the movement of insanity as the cost of intrusion
    its not fatility u seek but memories you embrace
    thoughts inraged, but its ur Pasts that you trace
    breathless thoughts that u seek but with no supervision
    futures existing, but u only feel the fatal incision
    not only a mission, but an infliction that u have to persist
    if u wish to inlist then its ur thoughts that just twist

    What has your insanity turned into a crude posture
    its not only a loss of care, but the mind that u foster
    as ur cold hands grasp ur head, and u start to sufficate
    but not on ur breath, on ur breathless thoughts that inferiorate
    crossin the line between life and death with ur mind
    as ur thoughts re-bind, ur prosecutions fatal and unkind
    locked up in ur own corner as u seek for appreciation
    but ur Breathless Thoughts had u lose ur Attempt for Alieviation

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    your a herb papa smurf isent banned noob and by the way he would neva ask poeple what he thinks this guy is a fake

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    yo murderous i like this peice i felt ur vocab, ur structure was there. yo i really felt this joint but u need to work on ur complexity and thats it man, ull be one of these nice people out here aight son keep it up aight im lookin to more of ur drops

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    i hope u won that battle cause that was a nice peice man

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    Quote Originally Posted by Lambragini
    your a herb papa smurf isent banned noob and by the way he would neva ask poeple what he thinks this guy is a fake
    lmfao ill prove im papa smurf
    i never said the name wuz banned
    wut u mean i wont ask wut peeps think? lol

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    Quote Originally Posted by *J-Blaze*
    yo murderous i like this peice i felt ur vocab, ur structure was there. yo i really felt this joint but u need to work on ur complexity and thats it man, ull be one of these nice people out here aight son keep it up aight im lookin to more of ur drops

    Thanx man ill work on my complexity a lil more

    still think im fake?



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    Lifes so contreversial, but i feel so diminished,
    cuz God is so unreal, his life's already finished....

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