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Point5 the Felon
Thomas
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Legend.
RB Original.
Meta. Convicts.
18-0 Crew Record, 06-07 Best Crew.
thomas
Our emotions are ready to blow...You cannot hide affection..
Why is she worried...She'll have my love and protection..
I have all to gain...But she has all to lose..
She will...But i won't..Care about people's views..
Forbidden or not i love her...that sweet tender voice..
When we are together...You'll hear me sing the worlds rejoice..
stand out lines^
nice read on thomas's behalf, good structure, and flow was nice
on topic and consistent 8/10
point5 the felon
poor verse, not really much it in
bit hard to follow, you should work on tryna get your verse flow a bit nicer
not feelin it 3/10
vote- thomas much nicer verse overall
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Legend.
RB Original.
Meta. Convicts.
18-0 Crew Record, 06-07 Best Crew.
Overall I vote Tom...Better consistancy, imagery, and decent vocab...Pretty much on-topic since there was alot of leeway in the subject...If anything I'd say both should elevate on the following, Point5 more so than Tom: Vocab, Multies, Concepts, Wording, and a twinge more of Creativity...V/Thomas