|Mosquitoes infect mosquitoes.|

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|Mosquitoes infect mosquitoes.|

Diluted pupils over sea..
a brigade of rain meeting concrete
Far from love, but magnetized
To watery edges carved into walls

Mosquitoes infect mosquitoes..
Blood bathes in unfamiliar pores
..Bellowing from dark rooftips
The sunshine, a nuisance.

Tears manifest into licks of rain,
and salt the thirst for diamond jubilee
Keys open doors;
But old doors reject battered keys

The phenomenon of aurora borealis,
Developed into paper..
I wonder: do thoughts have demons?
..The thought of you, stationary

My dreams chased by sleeplessness,
Arrive at your feet.. enveloped
But you don't open it- and your lucky
Temptation; the anthrax within..

I scratch the itch..
To satisfy myself for the time being.

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uprise, for some feed. I'll rtf everything.. word.

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ill hit everyone back with detail feed that gives this a decent comment ..word up.

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[HighEngineChief]

Wow this was pretty good, I liked were you were going with this and the tone was very nice. some parts were very good, you did fall off a bit on the 3rd and 4th stanzas. The aurora borealis reference seemed a bit out of place, maybe a metaphore that you ried to stretch to far for, other than that this was pretty good. I like the way you write and i see you being a very dope writer in the future so just keep the pen on the paper and you'll get better and better.

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...ts-334820.html
^^ Please RTF

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Upppp