Bailout Your Memory Bank...

[2triple0]

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...em-388655.html
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...es-388766.html

Go out on the town and don't bring troubles to the house
Say your in a relationship if you got a couple in your mouth
Need to see that I completely devastate any competitor
Because these cats are businesses that can't find investors
I'm like a light with no switch because I just clap-off
You think exposure is when your pulling ya man's pants off
Already took my throne there's No need to repeat myself..
Cuz any bitch that tried to take it, I'm going to meet in hell
"resume" what they're doing but that won't get your job back
Hey, Yo! I think I heard these guys on a Jurassic 5 lost track
These punches not enough? Your all verbally screwed
Cause Trip got no problem throwing a few personals at you
Trip bucks at you like he was throwing dollars at a stripper
and you think you got me fooled?
i'm just trying to holler at ya sister
Punches that are never off targets Trips selling carpets
Your going to need a bailout bigger than the stock market
Gotta pay people to be with you cuz you like being a loan
Nowhere to Go out on your own cuz you need a new home
Stealing for dope so you could have enough for the next hit
Your verse is like a fire alarm..
when you start spitting people run for the exit


1.

[country]

man im twisted wit this


like i wanna say the content is raw cuz u have some sick ideas but im not sure it was played right



flow was good it slippin in parts tho


but this was nice man, like ur style seem new u know

like u still need to tweek the shit

but keep spittin

[2triple0]

good looks... can i get some more feedback?

upping this one.//.

[Witty]

I liked it, I thought it was a cool like rant like thing, it flowed really well, whixh made it easy to read, so I didn't really get thrown off at any point. I would have liked to see a bit more content/storyline, because I think if you were actually writing about something rather than just ranting about anything, then you could produce something very good. It was cool for what it was though, keep at it, I'll keep an eye out for your future OMs.

Get at 'Kiss with a fist' for me please man.

peace

[fazeT]

Trip bucks at you like he was throwing dollars at a stripper
and you think you got me fooled?
i'm just trying to holler at ya sister
^^
funny shit

Punches that are never off targets Trips selling carpets
Your going to need a bailout bigger than the stock market
Gotta pay people to be with you cuz you like being a loan
Nowhere to Go out on your own cuz you need a new home
Stealing for dope so you could have enough for the next hit
Your verse is like a fire alarm..
when you start spitting people run for the exit
^^
dope az fuck besides the fact you sellin carpets? lol rap aint workin fo ya??

[DaMagicMilkMan]

I'm like a light with no switch because I just clap-off
You think exposure is when your pulling ya man's pants off

WOOOOOOOOOAH
nice puch,

Go out on the town and don't bring troubles to the house
Say your in a relationship if you got a couple in your mouth

like that one two

but oover all two many punches for a open mike, go check out the frony lines
you need more flow, keep on your grind tho fam

[Spoken]

i liked this. it wasnt no story oriented flow shit nah mean. but it was a ranted off freestyle which had a ncie flow of things and your ideas was great. i was into this an dyou had me bobbing my head and it wa s acool thing man... nice drop here

[2triple0]

lol thanks guys...i'll hit up those links in a minute ././

i actually thought about writing this the other night when i was watching some fucked up police video's television show...

don't ask, i know it don't make sense ././