LLL SEASON 13
Only check ins and verses are to be posted in your battle, do not post anything else.
verses due thursday 11:59 est
Regular Season - Semi Finals:
Minimum Lines = 10 Lines
Maximum Lines = 20 Lines
LLL SEASON 13
Only check ins and verses are to be posted in your battle, do not post anything else.
verses due thursday 11:59 est
Regular Season - Semi Finals:
Minimum Lines = 10 Lines
Maximum Lines = 20 Lines
checkin............................
14-16
The words I write are oxygen to greatness.
12
ya chicks a sexy hoe. got the brains of cop tho
she's monster n uniform. Uncuffed, I'd need a silver bullet & a crossbow
n the line limits stupid. I never peeped ya young hoe or ya verses
If you bring a sweet 16 then liqour'll a put a end to that virgin
I requested an extension, you request for opponents who wont whore you
We both fail somewhat cept for the 2nd portion of the request, dude
so brag bout the wolf pack, think the tribes fierce n shit
the NWO's finished. but your rockn red n black like you still run with the click
n daily I key shit, you runnin on gas so stop it with the tricks savin
I get topsy turby, you get no top off like she works at a gas station
so the leagues better now. The fakes n fictious get the x
real recognizes real and no one in the league greeted you yet
Last edited by L-Tidus; September 23rd, 2010 at 06:52 PM
i'ma need an ext most liekly plz
The words I write are oxygen to greatness.
extension granted... glOriginally Posted by Mafioso.
lol I'm busy only gt time for a keyed 10....and yea I'm on that purp bitch
this kids behind his computer screen hoping i dnt show prolly
but if I win I get a contender match...
and if u win your STILL considered a fucking nobody
and as far as the league I think GOW needs a lil more tips.
cuz fuck links, u should no he's not LLL wen his FL record is 4-6
YOU SOFT BITCH! I'm high as shit jus keyin and I'll still merk u.
cuz ya delivery is so washed up u belong in a fuckin lo'real commerical.
yea I'm blowin purple, my delivery is witty with no measure.
while ya name is LP, because all ya concepts are low pressure
my flows better, and we can tell by our punchlines
by 2 wks I'll be champions and by NEXT week u'll be back in frontlines
The words I write are oxygen to greatness.
ya chicks a sexy hoe. got the brains of cop tho
she's monster n uniform. Uncuffed, I'd need a silver bullet & a crossbow
n the line limits stupid. I never peeped ya young hoe or ya verses
If you bring a sweet 16 then liqour'll a put a end to that virgin
vs.
this kids behind his computer screen hoping i dnt show prolly
but if I win I get a contender match...
and if u win your STILL considered a fucking nobody
and as far as the league I think GOW needs a lil more tips.
cuz fuck links, u should no he's not LLL wen his FL record is 4-6
`` aight, now i quoted those from lpmn lines cuz they had potential to be dope but the wording was somewhat fucked on them. maf had those two punches and a couple more that almost made but maf, quit fuckin keyin ya verses and actually think about shit before you type.. lol at yes i'm on that purp bitch.. but i got maf with the stronger verse.. lpmn you're improving, just need to work the kinks out of ya wording a bit.
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LPMN:
you had some nice rhymes in your verse but there werent any harsh disses really...youre sweet sixteen/end to that virgin line was pretty good but you wasnt sayin shit to really affect maf...woulda been better if you worded that concept different and kept out the liquor somethin like
been wit ya girl for years and aint fucked, nothin u doin is workin
if you ever bring a sweet 16 in 5 mins i'll put an end to that virgin
take her doggystyle and straight merk it, have you wantin to fight
the neighbors'll think i got a guard dog, how i have ya bitch barkin @ night
^ just an example of how you can word concepts differently and sometimes it might let you run with it for a minute...i know that aint the dopest 2 bars ever but im just tryin to show you how you coulda thought it up to hit more effectively...
Maf: lol...muhfucka only brought ten lines
this kids behind his computer screen hoping i dnt show prolly
but if I win I get a contender match...
and if u win your STILL considered a fucking nobody
and as far as the league I think GOW needs a lil more tips.
cuz fuck links, u should no he's not LLL wen his FL record is 4-6
you really coulda lost this one fam...verse was slightly better even though it was a bar shorter but man u just barely skated by on this
v/maf
n the line limits stupid. I never peeped ya young hoe or ya verses
If you bring a sweet 16 then liqour'll a put a end to that virgin
This could've been dope. Wording killed you here.
vs
this kids behind his computer screen hoping i dnt show prolly
but if I win I get a contender match...
and if u win your STILL considered a fucking nobody
Lol. This was cool.
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Well this battle was ehh, alright I suppose. Like everyone else said, Maf stop keying your verses mofo! LP, your wording is the issue in your writing. Your not wording your punches to come off as harsh as there supposed to be. The concepts you had, had some potential to be dope punchlines. But your wording failed you here. Maf, your verse was alright for a keyed verse. Lol. Well enough to take the cake here.
V/ - Maf
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