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Please note the due times in the rules. Be on time, and as always, good luck!
Legendary Song - Winter Snow
Man if you show I'll give you DMT.
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Scytsophrenia
On that next level.. but STILL fuckin' crazy.
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I will show regardless, but I want that DMT anyway haha
Last edited by Malice; July 31st, 2011 at 03:41 PM
"Ready? go! sat where the old cardboard city folk
swap tales with heads like every other penny throw"
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The Artist and the Mogul
Through eyes of clarity - we dance among the free-domain
and chase its nothingness like raindrops on a windowpane
where absence is vast and the ruse remains intact
we wait on the window wiper to put his scythe to the glass
and in likeness - contrast,
Mogul manipulating innocence
whipped with rigorous Class - Structure and Businesses
They weather the weathered - birds of feather
Flock, cheat, lie, and steal together
Burdened by pressure - fear of an unknown
in constant effort, they make anxiety a home
pedaling scare tactics in a straight line
as if the sheep don't mind men wearin' a noose as a necktie
but i beg and i plead through instruments of artistry
a minister of canvas' - brushes and parlor dreams
yet the strive continues to occupy the vacant
superimposed laws - absolutes and nations
Racists and hatred -
Prejudice made it...
...but we, the artist, must find a way to change it...
The artist and the mogul, the hero and the fool
reality mapped out by fear resisting an Archaic Rule.
Truth.
"Ready? go! sat where the old cardboard city folk
swap tales with heads like every other penny throw"
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Puppeteer
A letter to future generations from Soul Slayer. Quit being obsessed with materialism and what you see in music videos... You're worth more that the amount reflecting on your bank account. Money is just numbers that don't exist so, don't get consumed and start chasing paper.
The world is very differnt now
we all help spread our demise.
Every last person, I'll tell you how
maybe together we'll become wise.
Gone are the days of freedom and barter trade kingdoms
with primitive ways where men had coitus without condoms
and welcom to decay, where shady characters fit the bill
dressing to kill, 140 traitors controlling the entire worls at will.
The truth can't be concealed if facts are cardinal points
for every billion worth of bonds that government appoints;
the federal reserve creates 15 more billion worth of money.
Here's the catch! It's electronic and this shit isn't funny,
approved as credit to states, businesses and even charity;
creating interest rates, determining fate of those lacking clarity.
The federal reserve is a privately owned entity of bankers
that own everything, from assets to government anchors.
You and I are at the bottom of this vicious food chain
wasting away in debt while our leaders enjoy personal gain
but they too feel the pinch, only 6.25% of money really exists.
So society will always be in debt but we still insist
on gucci suits and fendi boots while using credit cards.
Perhaps we're better off dead. I send y'all my best regards.
Last edited by Soul Slayer; August 1st, 2011 at 11:06 PM
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Scytsophrenia
On that next level.. but STILL fuckin' crazy.
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Malice: Really enjoyable piece here. The following lines put me in awe:
The noose as a neck tie line is flabbergastingly awesome and your closer lines are super good too. There was a cool rhyme scheme in this piece and the word choice throughout was very well done. Fantastic imagery throughout, it was also short and concise, all it needed to be. I think the structure held the flow back but it didn't take much away from the read. I found it very well done. Nice verse Malice!as if the sheep don't mind men wearin' a noose as a necktie
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The artist and the mogul, the hero and the fool
reality mapped out by fear resisting an Archaic Rule.
SoulSlayer: Another well done verse which is short and sweet. I could really relate to this one as I'm on a steady climb out of a hole I dug myself into. Flow was decent and a very creative concept from the picture. It made for a nice read. I'd have to say the biggest weakness of this is definitely the rhyme scheme, rather lacking, unless I didn't notice a bunch of multis and internals.
Vote: I really enjoyed reading both verses, I thought they were well done, but this was a pretty easy decision for me because of my reaction to reading Malice's verse. Great battle guys!
Malice
Last edited by trajik; August 1st, 2011 at 11:02 PM
infektedpenz
Malice, I'm really liking this new style of yours. Concise and to the point but still playing with words, manipulating them in a sense and makin' them into something much more. I really like the image you painted, the truths in this were pretty interesting and got my thinking. The beginning was dope, a great way to start the piece and you set the tone really early on. Your mix of line lengths would normal turn off people but I enjoyed the switch up and it kept my attention. Good, solid verse man.
Soul Slayer, your verse was good as well. I couldn't quite catch a solid flow because some of your end rhymes didn't rhyme. Perhaps you have an accent. But anyway, my main nit pick with you is that this was too predictable, I already knew what was coming. It was a good verse though, I would work on incorporating more internals though, makes the piece drag a little if there aren't any. I know there were a few but it didn't quite do the piece justice.
Overall this was a good battle, I got Malice taking this with a more creative angle to his verse, good battle.
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the theory of cause and effect is flawed,
we expect the outcome to mirror the struggle, that's wrong.
Malice - Nice stuff. The main thing I really liked about this piece was the imagery, that was probably my most favourite part of your verse although there were other things that also stood out from your verse. You spoke about some real stuff that I was really feeling and that really made it a good verse.
Soul Slayer - You came nicely, but wasn't as interesting throughout. The start wasn't too bad and kept me quite engaged but as the piece progressed I kind of got drawn out, I think a more polished rhyme scheme could have done wonders in this case.
I enjoyed Malice's verse more and thought he had a better verse with a more creative approach.
v/ Malice
Malice the beginning of ur piece was strongly written I thought
"They weather the weathered - birds of feather
Flock, cheat, lie, and steal together
Burdened by pressure -"
The concept was decent too I was trying to write on this, but it almost sounded illuminati like so I tossed it...but this was def. decent
SOUL wasnt really into ur...the rhyme scheme was reall choppy and forced...though the content is decent ur writing style is completely determined in my opinion by ur transitions and rhyme scheme...the block format forces it and u did quite catch it
vote mal
"the ink of a scholar, is worth a thousand times more, than the blood of a martyr"--lupe fiasco
"I'm sonnin' ya'll like father's day/disrespect pop and get popped like Marvin Gaye" Skillz
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Malice wins (6-4)
SS loses (5-7)
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Legendary Song - Winter Snow
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