Go Go dat

[Child-Raising Badass]

• Negro's in villages lamenting pillages...
• Vikings with red bandanas...
• Vikings mans look like Juelz Santana
• A Dipset Viking...
• No piking...fish nets...she catches dolphins with her legs
• Yes...Yes...No...can't stop right now...
• Superhuman? Superhuman samurai with their cyber squads
• awesome bods gettin turnt up with possom paws
• Already good...already wood...Yes...
• you can say our names but in guess
• don't undress...just get french
• Mama mami abba bless impressed
• What do you know about that...that life of quizing
• we winning with our adonis blood
• we winning with all our love
• we we we we we we...take this shit serious
• if not then your peasant & mysterious

[Know-It-All]

Ummm okay I have no idea what to do with this poetically. its interesting and kind of funny at times especially with the idea of a dipset viking. I think it would be better without the dots and with more poetic scheme to it. keep on writing.

[Karaoshi]

The bullet points aren't helping you. Also, try to focus less on throwing in rhymes wherever you can and more on having an actual focus to your piece. Give it direction, make it tell a story or paint a picture, but make it about something. This piece came off like a creative way of rhyming random thoughts, which to me is not poetry.

[OG Maestro]

Smh, keep writing Childish. lol

Get those bullets out of there & let's see some real stuff man.
This was hilarious though, points for comical value.