Thinks he’s a cop but he’s faking’ impersonating an officer is illegal mate
Robo is nothing but fake bacon, I’ll serve him up on a vegans plate
Need a lesson in perspective, coz U clearly cant write solid
Now Slayerr will finally get the vanishing point,
When Robo shoves the pencil into his eye-socket.
Plottin your demise.
Vote - Plot
Slayer had a light jab. Bordered on corny with its simplicity, but connects. Robo had a much better concept.
It was a bit wordy, but the set up & deliver allowed him to land harder than Slayer here.
Slayerr.'s pretend cop / fake bacon idea was decent, a good bar overall. I usually don't like "mate", "bro" etc used to make a rhyme work but it sounded natural here. I think it's just the finishing "I'll serve him up on a vegans plate" that was missing a bit of sting.
I too needed a lesson on perspective. Clean throughout, wasn't tailored to the opponent as with Slayerr.'s bar but it's a fresh concept to me & was executed pretty well so I have Robocop winning.
Vote RoboCop
vote-Robo
though wordy, had a better diss... Slayer needed more wordplay
aka Sorrow: the Broken Wing
Slayer was really bland to me. it lacked the sting plot had. the attempt is there but it needs to be harsher. although plots bar wording could have been simplified a bit
v plot
Slayerr your concept was ok. i think "fake bacon" made your punch a bit too predictable for me. Robo the angle on the punch was very nice and unexpected.GG fellas
v/Robo
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Slayer cool concept but didn’t like how you finished it idk it’s missing something
Robo I like the imagery. Decent set up and finish I gotta give it to
Robo for the better worded punch here.
Robo wins
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